Tuesday, 23 June 2015

Popcorn story

WALT recraft our writing

Boom! My beautiful creamy buttery popcorn was ready.  Ouch my ears popped too! Ooow it's 
all over my hands with the butter and cream working together!  Never mind I'll just wipe it off. I could
Feel all the warmth sliding  down my throat yay at least it's raining so I can watch a movie well I 
Am eating my scrumptious popcorn. It feels like a dragon just was breathing fire on my awesome buttery creamy popcorn while  I still can't hear very well because of my popped ear.

This piece of writing show my learning goal of using a wider range of descriptive words as well!

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